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We are imprisoned, in an open cage,
and through the cage,
we’re the same.
We reach for infinity and
our arms touch briefly which
almost makes me think...
there must be something more.

Beyond the gate,
we can light the darkest night.
But I still believe that
sometimes the stars and the clouds
will explode alone...
without anyone waiting or
expecting something more.

They tried to tell us we’re
forever lost
but there’s beauty in the breakdown
and we are broken down...
into pieces.
But we must believe,
and hope and pray
and wish for something more.

We had promised ourselves lies,
inside our cage of secrets...
And so we try again,
like ugly birds in a beautiful cage,
to reach out to anything
or anyone else,
if only...
for a dream of something more.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just a little note to let you know your piece has been FEATURED as part of your prize for the Title Poem Contest. Congrats on your honorable mention! [link]
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. I like how it flows, especially considering you used titles of poems as lines. This is a really interesting format, and I don't think I could write in it the way you can. :)
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Aeries-Raine Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
First of all, thank you very much for the use of your title. I couldn't have done this piece without it!

Secondly, thanks so much for your comment and :+fav:. The responses to Found Poetry aren't always positive, so I appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment on it. :)
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. I think Found Poetry is a cool idea. :)
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YalMoon Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Student Writer
Wow. This poem is just so wonderful. It sounds so whole. And everything actually makes sense, there are like no sudden jumps where you think "Huh? What has that got to do with the rest?" (I mean, sometimes people want that, but I personally try to avoid it). I really like. Especially cause I tried one myself and know how hard it is. I have to say that my try pales next to yours.
(Short: Awesome job!)
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Aeries-Raine Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:blush: thank you. thanks so much for the :+fav:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You did a very good job at merging all those titles into one poem that fits together (which in my opinion is the actual challenge behind title poems. The easily end up sounding like a box of loose gods that do not belong together.)
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Aeries-Raine Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree, that is the challenge. I'm glad you feel I was successful! Thanks so much for your comment and :+fav:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome :)
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alterlier Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
that was beautiful.
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